1.8 - MONTAGE STRUCTURE & sample essay

This lesson covers... the style that jumps around in time, with events that aren’t based on cause-and-effect but rather an overarching theme.
By the end you should... understand another approach for structuring your main personal statement.
Time 3 minutes
College Essay Essentials paperback: pages 14-19     |     ebook: pages 15-20

WHAT IS A MONTAGE?

Montage is something you’ve likely all encountered before, but some may not be familiar with the word itself . It’s a technique that involves using separate elements (pictures, words, music, etc.) to create a new whole. In filmmaking, the montage effect is used to condense space and time so that information can be delivered in a more efficient way.

Take the classic “falling in love” montage, commonly used in romantic comedies. We don’t see every single interaction. Instead, we see: one surprises the other at work, probably with flowers; they walk through the park; they dance in the rain; they pass an engagement ring store. You get the idea.

A few images work together to tell a larger story. And you can use this technique for your essay, to tell a larger story about you.

One important distinction between the Narrative and Montage Structures is this: while Narrative Structure connects story events in a causal way (X led to Y led to Z…), Montage Structure connects story events in a thematic way (X, Y and Z are all connected because they all will help me become a great dentist, for example). Put simply (and this is what I’ll write on a board):

Narrative Structure = causal connections
Montage Structure = thematic connection

FIND A THEMATIC THREAD

If you’re going to build a montage, you need to find a way to make the different experiences you’ll use feel connected. Think of it this way: if I just had a paragraph on growing up in Latin America, speaking of which religion, speaking of which literature is important to me, speaking of which… you’re going to feel understandably confused. So I need to have something that threads the pieces together.

The sample essay below (“This is me”) was written by a student who had multiple identities that connected to a range of values and experiences. “Identity” is his thematic thread.

There are virtually infinite things that could work as a thematic thread to tie your montage together. A place? An art form? A hobby? We’ll explore an exercise in a bit that can help you do so. But for now, here’s that “This is me” essay, so you can more clearly see what I mean by a montage and thread.

I also love to read this essay aloud, pausing to point out interesting structural elements. For an analysis of the points I cover when reviewing an essay, check out pages 58-70 in College Essay Essentials, or watch Lesson 2 in my pay-what-you-can How to Write the Personal Statement video course.

Trigger warning: This essay includes strong language.

This Is Me

I am Mexican.

The sound of frying empanadas and the smell of burning peppers. My mother calling me 'mi vida' and my relatives kissing my cheek. Running but never hiding from the dreaded chancla and always responding with, "Muy bien, y tu?" Childhood vacations to Puebla and Cancun, swimming in the ocean and playing in the sand. Feeling the need to be good at cross-country, feeling the need to be able to endure spicy.

Those are all me.

I am Chinese.

The utter preference for using chopsticks in every scenario and the unhealthy craving for rice with every meal. The sharing of every dish placed on the center turn table. Hotpot for celebration and tea eggs, of all things, as a favorite dish. My father's musical Cantonese conversations with my grandparents, and their constant inquiry asking, "How is school?" Being named after 龙, the dragon, for strength and living for three years in Shanghai. The constant pressure to get good grades, my father's desire for me to become a doctor, and the never-ending, "How are you so bad at math, you're Asian?"

Those are all me.

I am American.

A citizen with the freedom to vote. The freedom to speak my mind and the representation by all the cultures and countries of the world. Shopping sprees at Target and a constant diet of fast foods. Full acceptance of the consumer society and a rather unhealthy addiction to social media and technology. Going to football games on Friday nights and watching Netflix on Saturday nights. Always watching my weight. Always looking at others. Always wishing, always wanting for more.

Those are all me.

I am Catholic.

Sunday mornings always spent at church. The private Catholic middle and high schools each with masses for special occasions. Baptism, Eucharist, and Confirmation. Praying before each meal and saying, "Go away in the name of Jesus" to nighttime horrors. Theology classes and realizing there is so much more to religion than faith. Having something to believe in. Questioning what you believe in. Turning to God when I see the horrors in the world and getting no response.

Those are all me.

I am homosexual.

An unusual obsession with fashion and clothing. Watching Game of Thrones not for Daenerys or Cersei, but for Jon Snow and Jamie. Seeing Love Simon for the first time, and crying at least five times. Always conscious always thinking before talking. Going to an all-boys school. Dealing with gay being the go to expression for displeasue. Being called a “faggot” when I act gay. Fear of my parents finding out.

Those are all me.

I am Jonathan Kei-Lung Eng.

I love reading and am addicted to fanfiction. I have three siblings and love my two dogs more than anything in the world. I can't eat spicy food and I have the biggest sweet-tooth. I play League of Legends and soccer. I'm a Marvel geek and theater nerd. My friends call me Jenga. My teammates call me Jeng. My teachers call me Mr. Eng. I am Mexican. I am Chinese. I am American. I am Catholic. I am gay. I am all of this and more, and most of all, I am me. My identity is not a singular entity, but a conglomeration of experiences, believes, and origins. This is my identity.

This is me.

Neat essay, huh? In a bit I’ll teach you how this essay was developed.