Congrats! You’ve written your second draft.

Now that you’ve written your second draft, ask yourself:

1. Is my topic or thematic thread clear? If so, move to #2.

   • If your topic or thematic thread needs clarifying, go here.

2. Are the examples in each paragraph strong, specific, and visual? If so, move to #3.

   • If your paragraphs need upleveling, go here.

3. Are you happy with your opening? 

   • If not, and you’d like more ideas for your opening, go here.

Here’s a link to the College Application Forum for Students.

If you can answer “yes” to all the questions above, it’s time to move on to How to Make Your Essay More Insightful. But before you do that…

[action_item]

Action Item: Send your feedback request email.

If you haven’t already, share your essay with someone else.

Here’s a sample email:

“Hi, [Your Mentor’s Name]! 

I’ve just finished my second draft of my montage personal statement, and I’d love your feedback.

Finally: As you read my essay, what do you find yourself wanting to know more about?

Thank you so much for your time, 

[Your Name]